some unfinshed lyrics

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some unfinshed lyrics

Unread postby theanarchypoet » 18 May 2010 18:08

My heart dies
My fears stay
I cant think
Please get away
Cause I’ll never be
What you except of me
I’ll never see
The star you see in me

This is it
I have to quit
No time to cry
But I see it in you eyes

Your tears
Cut me to shreads
There like daggers
Cutting threw thread

I want to be
Everything
I want to feel
Your chest breathing
But I tie you down
I break you now
I cut you down
Just leave me now

please comment tell me what you think evem if you hate it


"We are all subjects of fate, ...though we must act as if we are not" - Phillup Paulman

Monogmy is all she wants from me but i see my life and its way to short

I wrote her name on the bullet, that way the whole world would now that she was the last thing to go through my head.
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Re: some unfinshed lyrics

Unread postby chanse » 24 May 2010 18:39

It's good but seems more like a poem to me. A couple of words are spelled incorrectly.

What you except of me - expect

But I see it in you eyes - your

Thanks for having the courage to post this.



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Re: some unfinshed lyrics

Unread postby theanarchypoet » 27 May 2010 19:46

lol i think it was phillup paulmen that once said "im writer i dont need to now how to spell" thank you for commenting :)


"We are all subjects of fate, ...though we must act as if we are not" - Phillup Paulman

Monogmy is all she wants from me but i see my life and its way to short

I wrote her name on the bullet, that way the whole world would now that she was the last thing to go through my head.
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Re: some unfinshed lyrics

Unread postby chanse » 28 May 2010 15:13

You're welcome.




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