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Old Stuff

Unread postby N.E.G » 13 Sep 2009 21:55

Hola. Here are a few things I found tucked away on my hard-drive. I thought I might share them here and get some feedback. The most recent of these is an '03 and I haven't written much besides school work lately.

Ash
Feeling the weight of gravity,
been so long since I was free,
constricted to earth,
invisible chains have bound,
my broken form,
to the ash covered ground.

Ruins and remorse,
ashes to dust,
falling farther,
into the path of no trust,
help me I plead,
into the uncaring void,
my broken wings,
the sight I avoid.

Grounded, fallen,
farther into my misery,
watching the ashes fall,
I contemplate what I feel for thee,
bordering hatred,
unconditional love,
this pain in my chest,
the skys weep above.

Watching through this window,
hoping to see the lights,
that mean you're coming back,
from where you went,
why I scream into the darkness,
as ashes fall,
and all dreams fade away.

Dreams
I don’t know if I am real,
or if I’m just your beautiful dream,
a vision that sprang from the mists,
of your subconscious stream,

shall we dance among the clouds,
to part before the sun will rise,
keep our true love hidden,
to all invasive prying eyes,

shall we frolic in the sunlight,
and lay together on the grass,
what shall happen when you wake,
shall none of this have ever passed?

Am I real,
or just your dream...


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What lie is this life that we lead?
An emotional torment through which we bleed.
The words of theose not even close,
Can hold more truth than the ones who should know,
What lie is this life that we lead.
Exposing the pain that’s been left there to seed.
What price do we pay for the sins.
We’ve yet to commit or conceive.


I have more but those are a fairly good mix of my style of writing. Thoughts, criticisms, critiques are welcome :)



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Re: Old Stuff

Unread postby yamoogirl » 20 Sep 2009 19:31

:shocked: Amazing! you should consider possible being a lyricist. Nice!




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