SPWC

Here we are,
Here we stay,
Never to far,
We can’t get away.

Shadows come,
Shadows pass,
Don’t know where from,
Or how long they’ll last.

They eat at us,
They eat at me,
There’s no time to fuss
We’ll never be free

These shadows yell
These shadows hit
This is my hell
Perhaps its time to quit

The pearl is white
The pearls is red
This is no new blight
Perhaps I’m already dead.

Who will mourn
Who will cry
I am worn
We all die

Shadows are here
Shadows are there
I’m stuck in this fear
Lifes not fair

The shadows pull
The shadows tug
I begin to corrode
I must now shrug

The pearl is white
The pearl is red
The grip is tight
My hopes in shreds

Here we are
Here I stay
Never to far
I will never get away

My name is on this stone
My legacy will never be told
The wood is my home
This martyr is always cold




please tell me what you think even if you hate it... well... you know

I find it a bit on the dark side (but sometimes those are the best subjects!) and the flow is good. The ending (IMO) feels more like a cliffhanger than conclusive. Overall, good job though, it was a nice read.

thank you katy

I like it..But dont you think that your repeating things abit too much..?
Overall it was a great poem, good job.. =]