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My sisters 2am poem

Unread postby wrxracer24 » 02 Sep 2009 12:58

My sister (KrystiBitch) took all the song titles from Dressed Up as Life & TriPolar and wrote this poem at 2am this morning. She wanted me to share as her computer has been down.

MY WORLD is full of ISSUES
that I can not hide
It's WAR just to get to THE BOTTOM
Buy MAYBE there's a better way to SURVIVE

It's ALL THE SAME to know YOU"RE GOING DOWN
the wrong way in life
WHAT ARE YOU LOOKING FOR out there
ODD ONE, I say, it is PITIFUL, you SHOULD'VE KNOWN BETTER

SO WHAT I LIED and said TOO MANY WORDS
Like I HATE YOU and the CANCER rumor
Please DON"T WALK AWAY from me
I screwed up, you know I'm IN IT FOR LIFE

My ASSHOLE FATHER never saw
what I see in you, MASTER OF THE UNIVERSE
You can be anything, do anything
DELIVERENCE is at your feet.

It seems like I want to be ANYWHERE BUT HERE
but HOWARD'S TALE says take one thing at a time
Please watch out for the RIPTIDE
Because someday you'll float away like WHITE BALLOONS.




She hopes you like it and wants to know what you think. She'd love to see your versions of using their song titles :rock:


You think it's all just playing, fun and games
You're treating it like a joke
Some people say they wanna be me
This life can be very deceiving
It's just your state of mind

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Re: My sisters 2am poem

Unread postby N.E.G » 13 Sep 2009 22:11

It's an interesting concept. Personally I feel that the poem is a little forced. I decided to take up your challenge and write one, but I just used the titles from Dressed Up As Life

The world is a sad place,
where the pitiful are plenty,
cancer thins the best ranks,
and most lives are found to be empty.

What are we looking for,
deliverance or damnation,
when we don't know anymore,
it's all the same regardless of situation,

too many words fill the air,
no meaning permeates their sound,
asshole father's issues create fear,
even after they're no longer around,

we close our eyes to howard's tale,
and grab the bottle to seek the bottom,
looking to be anywhere but here,
wanting the memories to be forgotten.

But how can we forgive the world,
if in our hearts, self-hate lies curled.



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Re: My sisters 2am poem

Unread postby wrxracer24 » 14 Sep 2009 08:26

Very Nice Like it ...thank you


You think it's all just playing, fun and games
You're treating it like a joke
Some people say they wanna be me
This life can be very deceiving
It's just your state of mind

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Re: My sisters 2am poem

Unread postby David » 21 Sep 2009 16:24

I like both of those, its a really cool idea. I might take up the challenge later and see what I can come up with.



I DO!!!!


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Re: My sisters 2am poem

Unread postby David » 21 Oct 2009 21:10

Ok, its no good, but I"ll post it anyways. I used only the tracks from Tri-Polar, but added the 3 bootlegs, Till Something Breaks, Dead Space, and The Pretender.

I can't stand the way you look at me
I can't bear when you look away
Your eyes used to shine
now I stare only into DEAD SPACE

I miss the way things once were
Our love lifted by WHITE BALLOONS
Then you said you found someone new
With this I found a new level of pain

I know we could have SURVIVEd,
I only ask you DONT WALK AWAY
I can't forget the things you said
It truly seemed you were IN IT FOR LIFE

Your the one who started this WAR
I know you wont stop unTILL SOMETHING BREAKS
You know you broke my heart, you didn't stop there
You know you leaving me crushed my soul

You expected me to be the MASTER OF THE UNIVERSE
You are THE PRETENDER, you knew I was the ODD ONE
SO WHAT I LIED
I was caught in the RIPTIDE of our lives

MAYBE I SHOULD'VE KNOWN BETTER
Maybe its better I HATE YOU
Someday you will miss me I'm sure
You'll know when you feel YOUR GOING DOWN



I DO!!!!



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