Unread postby ShadoWolf » 06 Jul 2011 10:19
Not bad! If you're going to keep it instrumental only, I think you should add some more instruments and it would sound even better. If you want to keep it the way it is, then I think you should add some vocals. The way it is right now is, not exactly boring, but it feels like it's missing something, if you know what I mean.
It's still pretty good and it sounds like it would make a great base for a full song.
Now I'm stuck here,
Trapped all alone.
But it's not my time,
I don't want to go.
You can't take me,
Break free these chains.
You can't have me,
I want to live again.